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一、任務呈现

盐城市一家西餐厅拟在暑期招聘数名实习学生，要求具备一定的英语口语能力。下面是该店在报上登载的招聘启事：

假如你是盐城中学高三学生陈明，愿意应聘。请给经理写一封求职信，介绍自己并说明你愿意应聘的理由。

注意：1. 词数150 左右;

2. 可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。

二、任务分析

1. 该书面表达任务是写一封求职信，属于正式信函，所以应该注意书信的正确格式。

2. 求职信的措辞应当恰当，忌夸大其词或过于谦虚;结构安排应合理，做到详略得当，重点写清符合该职位要求的能力、资历。结合该题，行文前应认真审题，切不可遗漏要点;行文时对要点的详略作合理安排。

3. 在遣词造句上，应尽量使用一些较复杂句型和高级词汇，以提升文章的得分档次。

三、学生习作

Dear Manager，

I learn ① it from the newspaper that you need atranslator. I’m really interested in the position and hopeI can work for you.Being a student in Senior Three，I’m a boy aged18. I’m fond of learning English and intend to enter aforeign language college after I graduate from highschool. It will be free for me during the summer vacation，which will give me a chance to find an opportunityto practice my spoken English. I feel confident that Ican fit the job.Though I won’t get pay for the job， but ② it willgive me some valuable job experience as well as the opportunityto practice my spoken English by acting as atranslator for you. What’s more， I’m healthy and goodat English， and I really enjoy making friends and communicatingwith foreigners.I’d appreciate it so much if you could possibly considermyapplication.Looking forward to your early reply！

四、教师点评

1. 错误评析

①“我从报纸上得知……”陈述的是过去的事实，因此该句中的learn应该用一般过去时，即learned。

② although 或though 不能和but 连用，故该处应当删掉but。

2. 亮点展示

① 习作者严格按照题目要求完成了该书面表达任务。文章先写招聘信息的来源，表明求职意向;再作自我介绍和说明个人特长;最后提出盼望对方答复的希望。全文层次清晰，表达准确，符合求职信的语言特点和结构特点。

② 在遣词造句上，能使用定语从句，如It will befree for me during the summer vacation， which give mea chance to find an opportunity to practice my spokenEnglish.宾语从句，如I learned it from the newspaperthat you need a translator.等较复杂句型;此外，还恰到好处地选用了what’s more， as well as， though 等一些连接成分。这些句型和连接成分的使用，提升了文章的得分档次。

五、英文求职信的写作要求

1. 掌握求职信的格式求职信属于正式信函，应该使用正式英文书信的写作格式。