李平梅

摘 要：高中英语书面表达的教学效果不理想，本文介绍一种形象易懂的“高富帅”三招写作方法以改变学生书面表达的写作困境，提高教学效果。

关键词：书面表达;改进

书面表达是语言学习的输出环节，也是一种创造性的活动，是学生学习的难点，更是老师教学的难点。一方面，没有扎实的语言基础、足够的语言输入和良好的写作习惯，学生的习作犹如脱缰的野马，不受英语词法、句法和语法的约束，自由驰骋在汉语思维下的发挥，导致一篇习作错误百出，学习效果差。另一方面，教师的教学任务繁重，无法对所有学生的所有作文逐一批改，学生的错误表达和写作习惯得以固化，教学效果极差。有什么方法可以改变这种教与学的困境呢？那就是把英语写作与改结合起来，先改错，再改进。

下面介绍“高富帅”的三招写作技巧，让同学们的习作“脱贫致富”起来：

第一招用词：低级淘汰，高级替代（高）

Chang’e was the first person who arrived there.

→Chang’e was the first person who set foot there.

第二招造句：脱贫致富，复起来（富）

富1代：用上定语从句或非谓语动词

In China， we believe that there is a beauty on the moon. Her name is Chang’e.

→In China， we believe that there is a beauty on the moon，whose name is Chang’e.

→In China， we believe that there is a beauty named Chang’e on the moon.

富2代：用上状语从句或独立主格结构

New Year is around the corner. We are going to hold a New Year party for you. It is intended to enable you to have a better understanding of Chinese culture.

→As New Year is around the corner， we are going to hold a New Year party for you， which is intended to enable you to have a better understanding of Chinese culture.

→New Year being around the corner， we are going to hold a New Year party for you， which is intended to enable you to have a better understanding of Chinese culture.

富3代：用上名詞性从句或并列句

Chang’e-4 probe has landed on the moon successfully. People in China are so excited .

→People in China are thrilled at the news that Chang’e-4 probe has landed on the moon successfully.

→Chang’e-4 probe has landed on the moon successfully and people in China are so much thrilled .

富4代：用上强调句或倒装句

①The dream of flying to the moon inspires Chinese people to make continuous attempts to explore the moon.

→It is the dream of flying to the moon that inspires Chinese people to make continous attempts to explore the moon.

②Our club’s works will be displayed， and we also have a valuable set of paper-cutting created by a famous artist of this field .

→Not only will our club’s works be displayed， but we alse have a valuable set of paper-cutting created by a famous artist of this field .

第三招卷面书写：干净整洁，帅哥美女来（帅）

注意单词拼写正确，书写规范，使用衡水体，字迹工整，卷面整洁，正确使用标点符号，卷面干净整洁美观。

以上三招简称“高富帅”，用一句话概括即写作词汇高级、句式丰富、卷面美观。掌握这三招，学生的写作水平可以有效实现从难产到顺产乃至高产的突破。