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I like summer vacation. I neednt get up so early. I can do anything I like to do， such as watching TV， listening to music， playing computer games， and reading interesting books. My parents are busy for① their work. I often stay at home lonely②. Sometimes I call my friends to come to my home. Sometimes I go to my friends home.

Although I am alone most of the time in my summer vacation， but③ I still enjoy my vacation.

江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学七（4）班 魏杰

点评

1. 优点：

小作者描写了自己的暑假生活，表达了自己对假期的喜爱。本文语言简洁，内容连贯。整篇文章文字流畅，用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① for改为with。be busy with sth.意为“忙于某事”；

② lonely改为alone。lonely是形容词，此处修饰动词短语stay at home，应使用副词alone；

③ but去掉。although不能与but同时出现在一句话中。

3. 评分：

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。