李泊瑞

【题目要求】

日常生活中，我们难免会遇到一些突发事件，遇到这些情况时该怎么做呢？请写一篇以“What to do in an accident”为题的英语短文，要求通过实例谈谈你的看法。

【习作展示】

What to do in an accident

First aid is very helpful and very necessary， because it can be used whenever or wherever we are in an accident and it can save our lives.

Let's imagine an accident. A boy is lying on the ground. He can't move. He is in pain. What can we do to help him？

First of all， it is a good idea to find out what is wrong with him. The simplest way is to ask him. But he could have trouble in hearing you or speaking to you， so we can shout for help or call the emergency center at 120.

Before help arrives， the most important thing is to make him comfortable. But remember not to lift him up or sit him on a chair. If so， you may drop him and hurt him even more. The right way is to keep him warm. You can cover him with a coat and wait for help to come.

Those are some good suggestions on first aid in an accident. If you follow them， they may help you a lot in an emergency.

【教師点评】

这是一篇介绍“急救”知识的习作。文章首先点明了“急救”的重要性，然后通过假设一个男孩遇到事故的场景介绍了最恰当的“急救”方法，最后总结全文，呼应主题。

文章采取“总—分—总”的写作方式，中心突出，层次清晰，信息内容完整，语言表达灵活。行文中小作者恰当地使用了first of all等过渡性词语和复合句式，并涉及了多种表示建议的句型：

1.It's a good idea to...

2.The simplest way is to...

3.We / You can...

4.The most important thing is to...

5.Remember not to...

6.The right way is to...

7.If you follow...， ...may help...

总之，无论从文章的语句表达，还是语法的正确使用来看，都能够凸显出小作者娴熟的英语语言功底。

这是一篇不可多得的英语佳作，值得与同学们分享！

（指导教师：汪竞雁）