安徽 胡发高

★话题概述

“羊羔知跪乳，乌鸦懂反哺”，人应该怀有感恩之心。我们应该感谢父母的养育之恩，因为他们为了我们的成长日夜操劳；我们应该感谢老师的教导之情，因为他们的谆谆教导使我们学到了知识，学会了做人；我们应该感谢所有帮助过我们的人，因为他们在我们最需要帮助时出手相助，使我们战胜困难并走出困境。感恩他人，这是一个永远值得被“点赞”的话题。

该话题的写作通常以记叙文为主，通过具体事例来体现某人的恩德，以及我们的感激之情。

★佳作赏评

My name is Mary and now I'm a newspaper reporter. I chose this job because I could travel around the world. The work has taught me many unforgettable lessons. I have seen wars, earthquakes and death. But I have also seen courage, hope and happiness.

Last year, I won a prize for my reporting in Africa.At first, I thought I got the prize because of my personal ability. But then I found I was wrong. I must thank many people for their help. Without their help,how could I have got the prize.

I was born in Jamaica. My family was not rich at that time. My parents had to work hard so that I could go to school. At school, I was not a top student, but I enjoyed writing. My English teacher said,“Mary, you are a wonderful writer.”I was greatly encouraged by what he said, and from then on, I kept on practicing.

A few years later, I began to look for a job. It was very difficult to find a job then. Then, one day, I went to see an editor of a newspaper to ask for a job. The editor gave me a job.“Everyone needs a chance at first.”he said.

It was my English teacher who encouraged me to be a writer. And it was the editor who gave me a chance to work. Now I realize that I must thank all the people who have helped me.

【权威点评】

这是一篇记叙文。作者以倒叙的方法写作，讲述了自己在一次获奖后的感受。她原以为获奖是她的能力所致，但后来发现这是众人相助的结果。她的父母辛勤劳作供她上学，英语老师深情鼓励她写作，编辑给她难得的工作机会。这一切使她认识到，她必须感谢所有帮助过她的人。

本文简单句和并列句居多，浅显易懂，同时也运用了几个经典句型。例如：

1.I chose this job because I could travel around the world.（表示因果关系的复合句）

2.My parents had to work hard so that I could go to school.（so that... 表示目的）

3.It was very difficult to find a job then.（It is+形容词+不定式短语）

4.It was my English teacher who encouraged me to be a writer.（It is...who... 强调句型）

5.And it was the editor who gave me a chance to work.（It is...who... 强调句型）

6.Now I realize that I must thank all the people who have helped me.（含宾语从句和定语从句）

文中还运用了多个亮点短语，如at first、because of、at that time、work hard、from then on、keep on、look for、ask for等。

★写作点拨

1.时态定位

通过“感恩生活”间接“感恩他人”的短文，时态应根据表述的需要而定。叙述故事情节时，常用与过去相关的时态。表述感激之情时，常用一般现在时和一般将来时。

2.经典词句

写感恩父母、老师、同学、朋友，以及其他帮助过我们的人时，所涉及的主要词……