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2017年的高考即将到来，针对最令同学们头疼的书面表达，我们给出了五个范例。

[范例Ⅰ][顺承自然，过渡流畅]

（2015·全国卷Ⅰ）

Dear Peter，

Id like to ask you to write an article for our schools English newspaper.

The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States？ And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals， and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant so long as its interesting and informative. 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28？

Im looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours，

Li Hua

點评 一般说来，英语作文要逻辑清晰，衔接紧凑，这主要通过衔接词的使用实现。但衔接词语使用过多，又会使文章显得不够简洁。纵观本文，主要是使用简单结构，搭配并列句和部分从句。尽管用的衔接词语不多，但并未觉得条理不清，结构不明。相反，读此文给人以一气呵成之感，其中的奥妙就在于文中虽然大量使用简单句，但通过对简单句式加以润色和修饰，如文中第二句It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries，句子主干部分为It carries articles，在此基础上再加上written by foreign friends about ...等成分进行拓展，很好地将题目的要求表达出来之余，还能与后文中的the alture in your part of the Unlted States对照，从而实现文章内容的完美衔接。

[范例Ⅱ][长短交替，错落有致]

（2016·全国卷丙卷）

Dear Bob，

Im sorry to say that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon. I have just found that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.

Shall we go on Saturday morning？ We can set out early so that well have more time to read and select books. If its convenient for you， lets meet at 8：30 outside the school gate. If not， let me know what time suits you best. I should be available any time after school next week.

Yours，

Li Hua

点评 在写作当中，为了增强文章的节奏感和可读性，可以交替使用长短句、简单句和复合句。而且多样化的句式能够显示出作者的语言基本功，达到提升作文评分等级的目的。范文的内容包括了所有要点，而且做到了语意连贯。文中使用了宾语从句that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon和the change will not cause you too much trouble，目的状语从句so that well have more time to read and select books，条件句If its convenient for you，省略句If not等。长短句结合形成呼应，使内容更加丰富。

[范例Ⅲ][难易相间，层次感强]

（2016·江苏卷）

On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it. It is beneficial to some people， while it puts others into a dilemma over whether to vote or not.

In my opinion， on-line voting is an inseparable part of modern life and should be welcomed， since it is no more than a way to participate in public life. It makes no difference from ordinary voting events， in which candidates go around to seek supports. In addition， the Internet makes surveying and voting easy and convenient， regardless of time and space. Furthermore， voting on the Internet makes instant feedback possible.

To be honest， voters sometimes feel annoyed， not because they hate voting， but because they are divided between emotion and fairness. Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey. Therefore， I hold a positive attitude towards on-line voting.

點评 范文很好地完成了所有任务。第一段提出网络投票很流行，给人们带来好处，同时也有不利之处；第二段给出个人观点和理由，观点明确，论据有力；第三段提出了合理的建议。

从写作技巧来看，文章……