上期主题：Fashion through My Eyes

什么是时尚，动人的衣着，洒脱的心，还是积极的生活态度？时尚又离我们有多远，唾手可得，还是遥不可及？而你对时尚又有着什么样的理解呢，马上来《舞文弄墨》书写一下自己的时尚观吧！

福建Erin Lin

Almost every girl is born to be interested in fashion. As for me, I believe clothing plays a key role in fashion, since it seems that people do sometimes behave differently when they wear different clothes. So a well-dressed person would be more positive and happy. By "well" I do not mean expensive or glorious, I mean neat and fit. Top fashion would make you special and unique, not just simply be wrapped up by some famous labels. Actually I always be satisfied by the fun of matching different style clothes, which would spark my creativity and make me more self-confident, instead of buying expensive clothes, in fact the brand of clothes is the last thing I would consider when I am shopping

Besides, fashion is always changing and elusive, but extremely seductive. Everyone gets different understanding about fashion and wants to dress with chic. However, fashion is such a personal thing than we do not need everyone else's admire or approval even, or even to share with others. Fashion is something that could make you enjoy your private time with yourself and also unique when you are among people.

外编点评：这篇文章很典型，说不上错，但不完全对。例如，文章开头…is born to be interested in fashion暗含着由于出生所以对时尚感兴趣，例如Prince Charles was born to be king（查尔斯王子天生注定是国王），正确的说法是almost every girl is born interested in fashion。第三个句子不必使用would，可以改为so, a well-dressed person is often more positive and happy。I mean neat and fit中fit应该说成a good fit 或 fitting well（合身的），单独的fit意思是健康的。第一段后半部的时态很混乱，应该改为I am always satisfied和which can spark my creativity。此处的最后一个从句（in fact…）最好单独成句，或者跟前半部分用分号隔开，因为此处表达的是一个新的观点。

第二段中everyone gets应该改为everyone has a different understanding of fashion。另外需要注意区别名词动词形式，如应该是else's admiration，而非admire。最后一句中应该写作fashion is something that can let…。Make一般是用来表达不想做的事，如The government makes me pay taxes（政府让我交税）；而let则一般用来表达你想做的事，如My mother lets me stay out late to see my friends（我妈妈允许我在外面跟朋友待到很晚）。

上海 Vera Liu

In my eyes fashion should be the perfect combination of public aesthetics and distinctive personality.

The wind of fashion has blown since the start of human history and changes its direction with time. In each century, even every year and month people may create different aesthetics related to various aspects of life, including costume, dietary, entertainment and so on.

To be fashionable is such a world-class allurement that people are easy to fall into the whirlpool of fashion. The most persistent pursuit may come from girls' adornment for dazzling dresses and accessories. With the guide of fashion magazines, magical designers and gorgeous models girls worldwide girls spend amount of time and passion on searching for the latest fashion index.

However, in my opinion the core spirit of fashion should be the unique beauty of each person. Audrey Hepburn is absolutely the best example. She is considered a fashion icon no matter in her time or now because she never caters to the so-called fashion of her time but only chooses the dress that fits her temperament well. With a face and heart of angel she looks incredibly elegant in the dresses with simple lines and pure colors.

If we keep chasing fashion we may be lost in the wind. All we need to do is to observe and reflect. We should keep watching the direction of fashion and keep in mind only the most suitable factors from current fashion can maintain our personality forever. 外编点评：写得非常好，总的来说，措辞的问题比语法问题要突出一点。例如，英语中可能不会常按文中的形式来使用名词allurement（诱惑物），一般说成to be fashionable is so alluring。Adornment（装饰物）一词使用不当，我猜想你错以为它是adore（崇拜）的名词形式，应该是adoration（崇拜、爱慕），可改写为girls' love of 或girls' adoration of。另外应该说成no matter whether in her time or now，这个句子还需要断开，最后在because之前和but之后加上逗号，结构会更清晰。此外，应该写做the face and heart of an angel，但dress前不加定冠词the（Audrey Hepburn的脸庞是独一无二的，用定冠词the；天使的脸庞是泛指，用不定冠词an）。最后一句中only前应该添加that作为从句引导词。全文只有一个真正的语法错误，people are easy to fall应该说成people can easily fall。

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