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题型分析

概要写作是一种要求学生在读懂文章的基础上用自己的语言归纳出文章主旨大意的书面表达形式，涉及“阅读+写作”两种技能的运用，因此对学生的阅读理解、概括归纳和书面表达等能力都提出了很高要求。浙江省新高考英语试题这一题型要求考生将350词的英语原文缩略成60词左右的概要，虽然写作的词数较150词的续写少许多，但难度并不亚于续写题型。考生要在概要写作中取得较理想的分数，必须做到以下几点：第一，需要通过阅读，准确把握不同体裁文章的主旨大意；第二，需要把握文章的内部逻辑关系，区分主要观点和用以支撑的细节信息；第三，需要用自己的语言，精准、连贯地写出主旨大意。

学生习作分析

1.题目要求

阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要：

Cyberspace（网络空间） has given rise to a new social change where people make friends from across the world， but know little about their next-door neighbors. This worries critics （批评家）.

Take Bob for example. He thinks his neighbor doesnt know anything about gardening， but his instant messaging friend Gr33nThum does. Besides， Gr33nThum doesnt do that annoying sound when he talks. Those people like Bob have long been criticized for their lack of necessary social skills. Critics think people almost forget how to naturally communicate with their neighbors， creating a social network of strangers.

However， a report entitled “The Strength of Internet Ties” provides a different opinion. Sociologists are suggesting that the Internet helps develop social networks and make use of them when it matters most.

Friends often move. As kids， our friends parents move away. As adults， we move away to college or for work. Communicative tools have made losing touch the result of laziness， not distance. “The larger and the more diverse（多样）a persons network， the more important e-mail is，” argues Jeffrey Boase， who co-authored the report. “You cant make phone calls or personal visits to all your friends very often， but you can keep in touch with them regularly with the help of the Internet. That turns out to be very important.”

In addition to expanding and strengthening the social ties people keep in the offline world， Internet and e-mail provide a social and informational support group that helps people make difficult decisions and face challenges. “Internet use provides online users a path to resources， such as access to people who may have the right information to help deal with family health problems or find a new job，” says John Horrigan， author of the report. “The Internet creates a new basis for community. Rather than relying on a single community for social support， people often must actively seek out a variety of appropriate people and resources for different situations，” says co-author Barry Wellman.

2.考題分析

原文是一篇层次分明的议论文，由五个段落组成。文章的结构为：引论（第一段），本论（第二段）和论据（三、四两段）。但文中有不少长难句，要梳理出每段的要点并用精练的语言加以概括，还是有一定难度的。

命题教师也给出了一个概要的样本：

Some critics worry that cyberspace will rob the Internet users of necessary social skills. （要点1）However， a report suggests that the Internet can be of benefits to social networks. （要点2）It can serve as a tool to help people stay in regular touch with friends. （要点3）Besides， it supplies people with social and informational resources when they are faced with difficult situations.（要点4）

3.习作点评

学生习作1（得分3分）

Cyberspace has given rise to a new social change where people make friends from across the world， but know little about their next door neighbors. Cyberspace are large and more diverse a persons network. It has more important e-mail is. So I think cyberspace are very good for our life.（50詞）

点评1

显而易见，这个考生的英语阅读能力和写作能力都是很弱的。文中除照抄原文的第一句话和第一个要点与原文意思接近外，其他没有点到任何一个要点。第二、三两句话也是从原文中的句子“‘The larger and the more diverse a persons network， the more important e-mail is， argues Jeffrey Boase.”改写的，且存在语法错误。……