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How to Make an Apology

2016-06-28

作文新天地(高中版) 2016年6期
关键词:语义建议

When it comes to the question on how to make an apology, different people will offer different ways. Among these ways, saying sorry face to face, making an apology through phones, text messages or emails and making an apology via others are most usually adopted.

From my point of view, I consider saying sorry face to face as the best way to make an apology. The following reasons may account for my preference. Firstly, saying sorry face to face indicates a more sincere attitude than any other way. In terms of making an apology, people attach more importance to attitudes than words. Secondly, it can be more helpful to settle problems, which offers a good chance for people to talk about the differences in detail. So it is not difficult to understand why I like saying sorry face to face to make an apology.

I think a small apology can make a big difference.

生活中总有对与错、是与非,当矛盾、误会、分歧产生时,常常需要一个主动的道歉来化解不愉快。学生可以选择一个喜欢的道歉方式来写,如面对面、打电话或发短信等,并陈述理由。

应该说,这是一篇比较好的高中生习作。点题到位,内容充实,结构完整,陈述清晰,收尾有力,总体写作思路清楚,行文干净利落。

首先,点题到位。言以简洁为贵(Brevity is the soul of wit),在100多字的篇幅中,要把自己的观点陈述清楚,意味着不能旁扯,不能有废话,一定要重点突出。该生在这方面做得很有技巧,承接已经给出的第一句,列举了常见的一些致歉方式,然后很快地切入正题——当面道歉。

其次,陈述清楚。在关于当面道歉这个话题上,该生给出了两个理由,分别是态度诚恳和有助于解决问题,并简要作了说明。逻辑关系清楚,语言表达清晰。

再次,结尾有力。虽然只是短短的一句话,但非常有力,也很切题。

虽然这篇文章写得不错,但也还有些小地方需要改进:

(1)Among these ways, saying sorry face to face, making an apology through phones, text messages or emails and making an apology via others are most usually adopted.

这一句中,并列的三个成分比较长,建议在最后这个并列成分的“and”之前,加上逗号,使句子结构更加清晰。一般情况下,学生会按照教材写的或者老师教的“A, B and C”来行文,但语言在实际的使用中,往往是千变万化的,因此需要根据实际情况灵活调整。

(2)In terms of making an apology, people attach more importance to attitudes than words.

“In terms of making”使用不当,其主语不应该是“people”,这样前后两个分句之间存在主语不一致的情况。建议改为“While accepting”,这样上下句的主语就一致了,主语是“people”,语义顺畅,逻辑连贯。

(3)Secondly, it can be more helpful to settle problems.

“it”的指代不是特别清楚,跟它实际指代的对象“saying sorry face-to-face”中间……

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