湖南省隆回县教育局英语教研室 陈博供稿

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【栏目要求】

1.将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩；2.在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；

3.根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由；4.给学生习作点评〈优点与不足〉；

5.请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

来稿请寄：430079华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》杂志社收

本期点评名师

姜经志男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑、《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》、《初中英语新作文》、《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。

Walking to School

I think walk①to school is good for us.At first，walking to school is a good way to exercise and it’s good to②health.Next，it’s fun to walk together with friends every day.We can talk about interesting something③and know each other better.What’s more，if we go to school on foot，our parents won’t have to drive us to school.They will have more time to work and relax.More walking and less driving can help make our city much clean④.The streets will be less crowded than before.So I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.

Let’s go to school on foot from now on.

安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校七（3）班胡月琪

1.优点：

本文观点明确，信息全面，立场鲜明。对“步行去上学”的优点进行了详细的阐述，最后提出自己的希望。本文使用了at first，next，what’s more等使得文章层次分明，结构清晰。而if引导的条件状语从句，使文章句式丰富，富有多样化。另外，短语的使用体现了作者不凡的语言功底。

2.需要修改的地方：

①walk改为walking。动词不能做主语，但是动名词可以做主语，故walk改为walking；

②to改为for。be good to意为“对某人好”，故此处应用be good for；

③interesting something改为something interesting。当形容词修饰something，anything，nothing，everything等不定代词时，形容词必须放在不定代词的后面；

④clean改为cleaner。much修饰形容词或副词的比较级，故此处应将clean改为cleaner。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。

【栏目要求】

1.将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩；2.在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；3.根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由；4.给学生习作点评〈优点与不足〉；

5.请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

来稿请寄：430079华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》杂志社收

本期点评名师

于莹1992年毕业于山东师范大学，中学高级教师，山东省梁山县优秀教师，获市级优质课一等奖，一直从事初中英语的教学工作，连续多年在中考中取得优异成绩。2012年12月在山东省英语竞赛中荣获优秀指导教师称号。先后在《中学生英语》、《山东教育导报》、《现代中学生》、《初中生英语学习》、《英语辅导报》、《英语周报》、《学生导报》、《新课堂》等国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文三十多篇。

I Want to Be a Teacher

“You want to be a teacher？ D.n’t be silly.Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.”My friend was puzzling①when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future.I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.

I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child.They are kind and respectable，like angels.They are learned，helpful and encouraging.I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for②success.I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn，change and grow up with my students.I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free.The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing，doing research work and anything I like.

I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher.Firstly，I’ll study hardly③to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills.Secondly，I’ll love my students and take proud④in my profession.Thirdly，I’ll trust in them，respect them and understand them.

I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world.I’ll take it as my lifelong career.I will never regret my decision.I think my wish will come true. D. you think so？

山东省梁山县杨营一中初二高成浩

1.优点：

本文以反意设问句开头，突出了主题。本文层次清晰，语言得当，衔接紧凑，说服力强，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。

2.需要修改的地方：

①puzzling改为puzzled。修饰人时用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；

②for改为to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“引起；导致；通向”；

③hardly改为hard。hard意为“努力地”，hardly意为“几乎不”；

④proud改为pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意为“以……自豪”。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。

井子天

出生日期：2002年5月1日

爱好：足球

座右铭：态度决定高度，习惯成就人生。

就读学校：江苏省连云港市新海实验中学教育集团延安校区七（12）班

指导老师：陈传光

My School Life

Hello，everyone！I am in my new school now.My school is very good.And my favorite place in it is the library，because I like reading there.I like the playground，too.I like playing football there.And of course，I like all my lessons.My favorite subject is maths.I live near the school，so I go to school on foot.

I enjoy my school life very much.

董婷

善良

出生日期：2001年10月12日

爱好：画画

座右铭：人努力了不一定会成功，但放弃了就一定会失败。

就读学校：江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学初一（5）班

指导老师：陈传光

Buying a Computer

Last Sunday my parents and I went to a department store.They wanted to buy me a computer.But I found that all the computers were too expensive.And we didn’t know which one was more suitable.

The shop assistant saw us and came over to help us.At last，my parents spent 6，000 yuan buying a computer.I knew I could do maths homework，draw pictures and surf on the Internet with it.I liked it very much.

寇笑笑

善良

出生日期：2000年12月21日

爱好：跳舞

座右铭：宝剑不磨要生锈，人不学习要落后。

就读学校：江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学初二（2）班

指导老师：陈传光

My Favorite School Life

My school life has changed a lot since this term.We don’t need to get to school early.We begin our lessons at eight o’clock.

We have four classes in the morning and two ones in the afternoon.After the second class in the morning，we do eye exercise and morning exercise.

School is over after the second class in the afternoon.We can do different kinds of sports. And we don’t have too much homework to do.We have lots of free time.We can do what we like.We can take part in many after-school activities.

In a word，we are happier and healthier than before.

曹嘉伟

阳光

出生日期：2000年2月5日

爱好：足球

座右铭：Where there is a will，there is a way.

有志者，事竟成。

就读学校：山东省东营市育才学校八（4）班

指导老师：陈金凯

Where There Is a Will，There Is a Way.

“Where there is a will，there is a way.”It is my motto.I believe I can succeed as long as I work hard.

Actually，I didn’t feel confident before，because I had many shortcomings and I didn’t want to make efforts.This made me often screw up a lot of things.At that time I didn’t know how to change myself，so I asked my father about this.He told me，“Where there is a will，there is a way.”It means I should make more efforts than before.

One year ago，our school organized a dictation activity.I thought this was a good chance to change myself.I prepared for it day and night，and I tried my best to do it.Finally，I showed my abilities and I succeeded on that day.From then on，I believed that where there is a will，there is a way.

The Earlier，the Better

When I was thirteen，I went to junior middle school.I didn’t know how to wash clothes at that time.Myparentsneveraskedmetodoany housework at home.My primary school was not a boarding school so I went home after school every weekday.Myparentsalwayssaidthatdoing housework was a waste of time.They asked me to spend my time on schoolwork in order to get good grades and get into a good junior middle school.

It was the first time for me to study in a boarding school.It was also my first time to wash clothes.I put the dirty clothes into a basin and used my right foot to“wash”trousers.I stepped on it again and again.My roommates looked at me strangely.“Why don’t you use your hands？”They asked me.“A foot is better than a hand.”I said to them.The trousers were hung onto the rope，and the dirty water kept dropping.“Why don’t you make it clean？You should wash it three times with water！”You could imagine how embarrassed I was！

When I was in Grade Eight，I could do chores easily.I said to my parents，“You should let me do housework as early as I can.My classmates always laugh at me.My bowl is dirty and my clothes are always not clean enough.”They started to agree me to do housework at home.

Ithinkit’simportantforchildrentodo housework at home.It is good for future life when we need to be independent.Someone like me still don’t know how to wash clothes，either！I want to say，the earlier children learn to be independent，the better it is for their future.

陈文明

出生日期：2000年1月19日

座右铭：真诚给别人，温暖给自己。

就读学校：湖南省永州市冷水滩区竹山桥镇学校初三（60）班

指导老师：张造云

越早越好

我十三岁那年上了初中。那个时候我还不知道怎么洗衣服。在家里，我的父母从来没有要求我做过家务。我之前上的小学不是寄宿学校，所以每天放学后就回家。我的父母总是说，做家务活儿是浪费时间。他们要求我把时间放在功课上，为的就是让我取得好成绩，进入一个好中学。

这是我第一次上寄宿学校，也是我第一次洗衣服。我把脏衣服放进洗脸盆，然后用右脚去“洗”裤子。我踩了又踩，室友们都奇怪地看着我。“你为什么不用手洗呢？”他们问我。“脚比手好。”我对他们说。裤子悬挂在绳子上，脏水不停地往下掉。“你为什么不把它弄干净呢？你应该用水洗三次！”你可以想象，当时我有多么尴尬！

在我读八年级的时候，我轻轻松松就做完家务。我对父母说：“你们应该尽早地让我做家务活儿。我的同学老是嘲笑我。我的碗是脏的，我的衣服总是不够干净。”他们开始同意我在家里做家务。

我认为，对孩子来说，在家做家务很重要。当我们需要独立的时候，它有利于未来的生活。有人像我一样，也不知道怎么洗衣服。我想说，孩子们越早学会独立，对他们的未来越好。

Hotel Transylvania 2《精灵旅社》

湖南省隆回县教育局英语教研室 陈博供稿

导演（ D.rector）：格恩迪·塔塔科夫斯基（Genndy Tartakovsky）

配音演员（ D.bber）：亚当·桑德勒（Adam Sandler）赛琳娜·戈麦斯（Selena Gomez）史蒂夫·布西密（Steve Buscemi）凯文·詹姆斯（Kevin James）安迪·萨姆伯格（Andy Samberg）梅尔·布鲁克斯（Mel Brooks）

类型（Type）：动画（Animation）/喜剧（Comedy）/家庭（Family）

国家/地区（Country/Region）：美国（USA）

制片公司（Production Company）：索尼影视动画公司（Sony Pictures Animation）

上映日期（Release Time）：2015年9月25日（September 25th，2015）

Hotel Transylvania is now opened to human guests.Mavis and Johnny have a baby boy named D.nnis who is lack of any vampire2abilities.His grandfather， D.acula worries about it. When Mavis and Johnny go on a visit to Johnny’s parents， D.acula calls his friends to help him put D.nnis through a“monster-in-training”camp.Meanwhile，Vlad arrives at the hotel and to his dissatisfaction3finds out that his grandson is not a pure blood vampire and that Hotel Transylvania now accepts humans.

精灵旅社现在也向人类住客敞开大门。梅菲斯和强尼有了宝贝儿子丹尼斯，但丹尼斯没有吸血鬼的能力。这点让他的外公德古拉感到担忧。趁梅菲斯和强尼拜访强尼的父母之际，德古拉找来他的朋友来帮助他让丹尼斯通过“怪兽训练营”。此时，瓦拉德来到旅社后，却失望地发现他的孙子不是纯种吸血鬼，而且精灵旅社现在接待人类住客。