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【問题导读】

读后续写要求我们在阅读完原文后，根据要求和提示句把文章未写完的部分补充完整，使之构成一个完整的故事。因此，一篇好的读后续写，不仅要有丰富的内容、巧妙的构思和规范的表达，还需要把这些内容有效地衔接起来，使续写的内容与原文在逻辑和语言上都能保持衔接与连贯。而我们在读后续写实践中往往存在以下问题：主题理解不清，续写内容缺少与原文的合理衔接，续写的情节或角度与原文脱节，人物性格与原文不一致，语言风格与原文差异太大，叙事节奏过快或过慢，等等。

【名师导学】

衔接是一种使上下文之间取得连接与过渡的写作技法，主要作用是使文章保持意义上的连贯和语言表达上的流畅。除此之外，在读后续写的写作中，还应保持情节与原文的连贯、语言风格和人物性格的协调以及叙事节奏的一致。只有关注多维度的衔接，才能在原文的基础上续写出符合故事情节发展、可读性强的故事。

读后续写要求续写的段落与原文思维连贯、语言风格一致。以下以案例为指导，阐述如何“续”原文中的思维和语言，以激活学生的思维和语言，从而更好地进行续写。

【案例导引】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

One weekend in July， Jane and her husband， Tom， had driven three hours to campovernight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately， on the way an unpleasant subject came upand they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake， Jane was so angry that shesaid to Tom，“ I＇m going to find a better spot for us to camp.” Then she walked away.

With no path to follow， Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she hadclimbed to a high place， she turned around， hoping to see the lake. To her surprise， she saw nothing but forest and， far beyond， a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized thatshe was lost.

“Tom！” she cried.“ Help！”

No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane keptmoving， but the farther she walked， the more confused she became. As night was beginningto fall， Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark， Janewanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him howmuch she loved him.

Jane rose at the break of day， hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling （滴落）somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy， shealso saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had shetasted anything better. Feeling stronger now， Jane began to walk along the stream andhoped it would lead her to the lake.

As she picked her way carefully along the stream， Jane heard a helicopter. Is that forme？ Unfortunately， the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A fewminutes later， another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse， thinkingthat she should go to an open area and flag them down if they came back again.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

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But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

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It was daybreak when Jane woke up.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

文本解讀

一、思维上的衔接与连贯

一篇好的文章或一个好的故事，它的情节设计通常有理有据且引人入胜，它的语言表达通常合理且严密，它的内容紧紧围绕主题而展开。……