教你如何写“健康与安全”书面表达
2021-08-13张新峰
张新峰



健康与安全和人们的生活密切相关,中学生的健康与安全问题是人们特别关注的话题,也是中考常考的话题。此话题主要从以下三个方面进行设题:
1. 中学生面临的健康问题,如晚睡、不吃早餐等;2. 运动与健康;3. 安全教育,如食品安全、出行安全等。
一、典型例题剖析
假设你是一名老师,对学生进行以“自我保护”为主题的消防安全教育,请以“How to Protect Yourself in a Fire”为题,提出你的建议。
要求:1. 短文中不得出现真实的人名和地名;2. 书写工整,语句通顺、连贯,词数不少于80。
参考词汇:cover v. 遮盖;take the lift 乘坐电梯;exit n. 出口;towel n. 毛巾;shut off 切断
【教你审题】
仔细审读所给提示,可以提取以下信息:
1. 主题:How to Protect Yourself in a Fire
2. 体裁:说明文。
3. 人称:第二人称。
4. 时态:一般现在时。
5. 思路点拨:可以采用三段式作文。第一段引入主题;第二段从几个方面说明我们在火灾中如何保护自己;第三段提出倡议。
【素材积累】
1. 提分短语
keep calm 保持冷静;at once 马上;as soon as possible 尽快;shut off 关闭;take the lift 乘电梯;go downstairs 下楼
2. 提分句子
开篇句:
When you are in a fire, do you know how to protect yourself? 在火灾中,你知道如何保护自己吗?
Here are some suggestions for you. 这是给你的一些建议。
结尾句:
Remember these suggestions. They are good ways which can help you protect yourselves in a fire. 记住这些建议。它们是一些在火灾中可以帮助你保护自己的好方法。
点睛句:
Firstly, you should keep calm and call 119 at once. 首先,你应该保持镇静,立即拨打119。
The firefighters will come and save you as soon as possible. 消防员们会尽快来救你。
Secondly, shut off the electricity. 其次,关闭电源。
Thirdly, find a towel and make it wet. 第三,找到一条毛巾并把它弄湿。
Use the wet towel to cover your mouth and nose. 用湿毛巾捂住你的嘴巴和鼻子。
Fourthly, dont take the lift to go downstairs. 第四,不要乘电梯下楼。
Safety in mind, from the danger. 安全铭记于心,从此远离危险。
Safety, the source of life. 安全,生命的源泉。
Always pay attention to safety and prevent fire everywhere. 时时注意安全,处处预防火灾。
【写作模板】
【佳作赏析】
[How to Protect Yourself in a Fire
① When you are in a fire, do you know how to protect yourself? Here are some suggestions for you.
② Firstly, you should keep calm and call 119 at once. ③ The firefighters will come and save you as soon as possible. Secondly, ④ shut off the electricity. ⑤ Thirdly, find a towel and make it wet. ⑥ Use the wet towel to cover your mouth and nose. ⑦ Fourthly, dont take the lift to go downstairs.
Remember these suggestions. ⑧ They are good ways which can help you protect yourselves in a fire. 賞析:
①使用疑问词+不定式的宾语从句。
②生活常识:发生火灾打119。
③使用短语as soon as possible 尽快。……
