浙江 胡君祥

人生的道路是曲折的，谁都可能会犯错。 错误可能是下一次错误的开始，也可能是成功的基石，它会带给你失败，更会给予你成功。

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“Time to go, Jacob! ” Mom called. Fouryear-old Jacob hopped off his bed and ran downstairs. “What are we going to buy? Can I help you?” It was Jacob's turn to go shopping with Mom, and he was full of questions.

“We are going to buy groceries.” Jacob smiled as Mom helped him into his seat in the car and buckled the seat belt. This was going to be great! Mom pushed the grocery cart up and down the aisles（走廊）while Jacob held the shopping list. He helped organize the groceries and got to choose if they got red apples or yellow apples, and red potatoes or white potatoes. When they finished getting the items on the list, Jacob helped push the heavy cart up to the checkout line. He watched as the manager printed a receipt for what Mom had bought. Suddenly, Jacob noticed that the shelves he was standing by were full of candy and gum. Jacob saw a package of blueberry bubble gum and knew it tasted really good. He did have some money in his money jar at home, but he did not carry it right now.So he put the package in his pocket without paying for it.

When they got home, they carried the bags of groceries inside and put them on the kitchen counter. When Mom finally found Jacob's package of gum, she asked him carefully,“Did you take that gum from the store?”

Jacob nodded his head slowly. Mom looked sad. “Jacob, when we do something that is wrong—like taking gum from the store without paying for it—it's stealing. We need to be honest.”

“What shall we do next?” Jacob asked.

“First, we need to know that we have done something wrong and feel sorry about it. Then we need to fix the problem the best we can.Since you already opened the package of gum and ate some of it, we can't give it back to the store. What do you think we should do?”

Language Study

Useful sentence patterns

1. It was Jacob's turn to go shopping with Mom.

分析：It be one's turn to do... 为固定句型，意为“轮到某人做……”。

2. He did have some money in his money jar at home.

分析：本句中did是助动词，用于加强语气。

Reading Check

阅读上面的文章，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1:

Jacob said, “I have some pocket money. I could go back to the store and pay for the gum.”

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Paragraph 2:

“What are you trying to tell me?” asked the manager, surprised.____________________

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写作导引

一、语篇研读

读后续写要求续写的部分在情节和逻辑方面与原文高度契合。 为此，我们必须在掌握文本大意和叙述意图的前提下，分析所给文章的情境模式。

分析记叙文的情境模式，就需要关注5个“W”，即who、what、when、where、why。 我们在阅读时要把握故事的情节线，分析故事的起因、开始和发展，并归纳出故事的主要矛盾，根据文章中已知的信息，如情感的线索、行为的线索、时间的线索、空间的线索等来推断将要发生的事情，合理构思续写部分的情节。

elements 分析：所给短文的情境模式 发展：续写短文的情境模式 说明：如此构思的理由Basic Who Mom, her four-year-old son Jacob and the manager What Mom, her four-year-old son Jacob and the manager Jacob took away a package of blueberry bubble gum from a store without paying for it.Mom took Jacob to the store to make an apology and pay for all the gum.After Mom returned home and found Jacob's mistake Where At home and in a store In the store Why Having no money, Jacob stole a package of blueberry bubble gum.When When Mom and her son bought groceries Mom loved little Jacob. She wanted to make Jacob realize his mistake and also protect his selfesteem.Mom thought it wrong to steal and they should be honest.

二、深度思考

基于原文和续写段落首句提供的信息，采用围绕中心提问的方法，构思要续写的故事情节，这个过程一般分为四步。

第一步，根据已给出的文本判断文章的立意。

根据所给出的情节“四岁的雅各布随妈妈一起购物时偷了商店的一包蓝莓泡泡糖”可推断出本文的立意应是“当我们犯了错误时要知错就改”。