禹晓月 湖南长沙市中南大学第二附属中学 八年级

最喜欢的英语格言：No cross， no crown.不经历风雨，怎能见彩虹？

习作：

When I was a child， I had no idea what the homeland meant. I just knew that I lived in a place where there was no war but peace and happiness. However， I didnt know how many soldiers had lost their lives to defend our motherland and how much pain she had in her memory.

Now， as a teenager in the 21st century， I am proud of being a Chinese student！ Many years ago，my motherland was deeply hurt by the enemies， and she was in danger of being destroyed. But Chinese people never gave in and they fought against the enemies bravely！ Chinese people have proved themselves. Gone is the name of “the sick man of East Asia” ， forever. Now we are getting stronger and stronger.

I love my homeland！ Nowadays， we have safe society and beautiful environment. We Chinese teenagers should study hard and try our best to shoulder our responsibilities for our homeland.

I love my homeland！ I love China！

点评：

作者以自己的成长为背景，回顾祖国的历史，描绘祖国的现状，表达了自己对祖国的热爱。高级词汇、短语和句型的使用是写作的亮点，如“a place where there was no war but peace and happiness， give in， shoulder ones responsibilities， fight against”等。

（指导老师：刘玉立）

赵 茹 山东新泰市禹村中学 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：You cannot improve your past， but you can improve your future.你不能改变你的过去，但你仍能改善你的未来。

习作：

There are many countries in the world， but I love my country best. China is my greatest motherland. Since the day I was born， I began to have a proud name： Chinese. Im so proud that Ive got the beautiful yellow skin， black eyes and black hair. Im also proud that I speak Chinese which is the most beautiful language in my heart.

China has more than five thousand years history， and it is one of the biggest countries in the world. Every time I talk about Chinese culture to the foreign people， they speak highly of it.

You know， the capital of China is Beijing. There are so many beautiful places of interest there， including the Imperial Palace， Tiananmen Square， the Great Wall and so on. Also， the food is delicious and Chinese people are friendly.

In a word， China is such a beautiful country that I love it very much.

點评：

作者先用“China is my greatest motherland”明确观点，然后阐述祖国的悠久历史与丰富多样的文化，并以受到外国友人的高度赞扬而感到骄傲，拳拳之心、殷殷之情溢于言表。在阐述缘由时，用到了“including”及“also”等词汇，结构严谨，思路清晰。

（指导老师：王 普）

罗雨薇 湖南长沙市明德华兴中学 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：Everything worth doing is worth doing well. 一切值得去做的事情都值得做好。

习作：

Homeland is the best place for everybody， including me. I live in ChangSha（长沙）， which is known to people in China as the city of beautiful scenery， it is also well known for its history. As for me， ChangSha has left many sweet and soft memories in my heart.

ChangSha is the capital of Hunan Province， it receives a lot of visitors every year because of its famous historical places. YueLu mountain is the best example of this. When you climb to the top of the mountain， fresh air will fill your chest， and this will make you feel relaxed and comfortable. But that is just one of the reasons I love ChangSha.

Another reason is that ChangSha people are warm-hearted and friendly. In fact， people in ChangSha can talk wherever they are， even on buses. They often invite people to their homes and taste the food which they cook themselves.

All in all， ChangSha not only carries my childhood memories， but also represents Chinas wonderful culture and natural beauty. And this is my homeland which I deeply love.

点评：

作为一名土生土长的长沙人，作者细数了自己热爱家乡的原因。最后一段，用“All in all”句型作总结，逻辑清晰，结构严谨。 （指导老师：徐 京）

赵 刚 山东安丘市东城双语实验学校 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：Cultivated in minutes， in small gain. 耕耘于分秒，收获于细微。

习作：

My hometown is Weifang（潍坊）. It is located in the middle of Shandong Peninsula. Its a beautiful city with a long history. A number of famous people came from our city， such as Jia Sixie（贾思勰）， Zhang Zeduan（张择端）， Liu Yong（刘墉） and so on.

There are lots of beautiful mountains， rivers， lakes and ancient villages. Weifang is also famous for its kites and is known as the “International Kite Capital”.

Now transport has become more convenient. There are airports， highways， high-speed railway stations and railway stations in Weifang.Every year，thousands of people from China and other countries come to visit our city.

People of our city are all hard working. Though they are having a rich and good life， they are still working hard to build their city into a modern one.

Its a beautiful city， isnt it？ Are you attracted by it？

點评：

作者用“Though”句型表达人们的进取精神；用反义疑问句“Its a beautiful city， isnt it？”增强思想感情。 （指导老师：刘树春）

刘 璐 山东安丘市东城双语实验学校 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：Difficult is a piece of stone， it is a stumbling block to the weak， for it is a stepping stone to the strong. 困难是一块顽石，对于弱者它是绊脚石，对于强者它是垫脚石。

习作：

This summer vacation， I went back to my home village， JingZhi（景芝）. I was so surprised that great changes have taken place in recent years.

In old times， the villagers had a hard life. There used to be old and low houses on the streets. There wasnt convenient traffic and the children had to walk a long way to school.

Today， the villagers are living a happy life. High buildings can be seen everywhere. More and more people have bought their own computers， mobiles and even private cars！ Children can also get very good education. In addition， the environment has become more beautiful. The sky is bluer， the water is clearer， the roads are wider and the trees are greener.

Thanks to our government for building new countries for us， great changes will lead us to have a better life.

点评：

作者用“used to”句型介绍过去的状况；插入语“In addition”使文章过渡自然；最后用“Thanks to”句型阐明观点，用法准确、思路清晰。 （指导老师：刘树春）