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Im a middle-school student in Yangying Middle school. My name is Liu Lei. Im fourteen years old.

Im in Grade one① this year. I like English very much and Im in charge of our English study. Some of my classmates often ask me to help them with their English. Its an② interesting work and I like it.

Im a gentle boy like a girl. I have bright， beautiful and big eyes. I dont get angry easily. Im happy all the time. If someone asks me to help him， I am always ready to help and my teachers always praises me on③ that. I can finish all homework on time.

I like reading all kinds of books and newspaper especially the books on study. I didnt read them careful④ before. But now I can read them even more carefully. And now I come to know that books are my best friends.

山東省梁山市扬营中学七年级（2）班 刘磊

点评

1. 优点：

本文大都采用一般现在时写成，全文语言流畅、简练，且句子通顺，富有童趣。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①one改为One。Grade One为专有名词。

②去掉an。work是不可数名词。

③on改为for。praise sb. for sth.意为“称赞某人做某事”。

④careful改为carefully。修饰动词用副词carefully。

3. 评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。endprint