Do you like cartoons？ I am crazy about cartoons because they are very interesting and cartoon music listens① really great. I have a great time when I watch the cartoon films.

When I was a child， my mother and my grandmother showed me some cartoon books. When I was four years old， I could watch cartoons on TV and② I didnt understand them at all. When I was eight years old， I could understand some of the words in the cartoons. So I could understand lots of animals and people in the cartoons. Now， I am crazy with③ cartoons. I read comics and watch cartoon films during my holidays. I like drawing. So I want to draw people in the cartoons. I think I can draw them good④.

1. 優点：

如今，喜爱动画的中学生越来越多，小作者许晴也不例外。她是一个动画迷，动画几乎一直陪伴着她的成长，陪她度过了一个美好的童年。小作者十分喜欢动画并想用画笔把动画人物记录下来。全文行文流畅、用词得当、思路清晰，是一篇不错的学生习作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①listens改为sounds。此处是系表结构，sound是系动词，意为“听起来”，great是形容词做表语。

②and改为but。上下文是转折关系。

③with改为about。be crazy about意为“对……着迷”。

④good改为well。修饰动词draw应使用副词well。

3. 评分：

按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得17分。