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There are many words in English which have magic power. Do you know what they are？ Let me tell you. Theyre polite words such as “please， thank you， sorry and so on” .

Polite words can develop the friendship between each other. For example， it is easier to get on well with each other if we speak “please” and “thank you” now and then. Polite words can also improve the relationship and help to solve problems. For example， when the man whom you knock into is angry， speaking “sorry” can help you get forgiveness from him. Whats more， polite words can lead to success. We all know that one mans success is based on how he deals with people. The more you are grateful to other peoples kindness， the more support you will win from others， and definitely the faster you will move towards your goal.

What magic power polite words have！ They cost nothing but they are worth a million dollars！ To some extent， a word makes a world！

张稳花老师点评：

这是作者在高一时所写的一篇命题作文，本文第一段提出问题，抛出论点，第二段通过用“礼貌的语言可以发展友谊，礼貌的语言还可以改善关系，帮助解决问题，礼貌的语言甚至能通向成功”来论证礼貌的语言所具有的神奇魅力。“also”和“ whats more”的使用使文章意思层层递进，最后一段作者的鲜明观点跃然纸上，虽没有明明白白地号召大家使用礼貌用语，字里行间却强烈地表达了此意，写作手法非常高明。文章句式多变，多次使用定语从句、宾语从句、感叹句、条件状语从句等。文章中还出现了一些亮点句子，如：“The more you are grateful to other peoples kindness， the more support you will win from others， and definitely the faster you will move towards your goal.”“They cost nothing but they are worth a million dollars！ To some extent， a word makes a world！”等这些句子使得文章高端大气。但文章中也出现了一些细节问题，如say 与speak的用法不当等。

There are many words in English which have magic power. Do you know what they are？ Let me tell you. Theyre polite words such as “please”“thank you”“sorry” and so on.

Polite words can develop the friendship between each other. For example， it is easier to get on well with each other if we say “please” and “thank you” now and then. Polite words can also improve the relationship and help to solve problems. For example， when the man whom you knock into is angry， saying “sorry” can help you get forgiveness from him. Whats more， polite words can lead to success. We all know that one mans success is based on how he deals with people. The more you are grateful to other peoples kindness， the more support you will win from others， and definitely the faster you will move towards your goal.

What magic power the polite words have！ They cost nothing but they are worth a lot！ To some extent， a word makes a world！