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Health is important in our life. If you dont have health， although you have money， you wont happy.

First of all， we must eat healthy food. We should eat as much fruit as possible and less junk food. Next， you should take exercise everyday， such as play basketball， run and so on. Third， you should have good living habits， go to bed early and get up early. Furthermore， we are supposed to sleep for at least 8 hours at night.

In a word， enough exercise and good habits can help us keep healthy.

谢芳老师点评：

人称有点儿乱，应该前后统一。谈到保持健康，作者打算从饮食、锻炼和生活习惯三个方面来描述，但是在写作过程中，层次不够清晰，句与句之间的衔接欠妥当，个别句子出现动词错误，非谓语动词使用不当。修改之后的文章句式多变，衔接自然，算得上一篇比较合格的中考考场作文。

Its known to all that health is very important in our life. How can we keep healthy？

First of all， we must eat healthy food. We should eat enough vegetables and fruit instead of junk food. Next， drinking enough water is necessary. Third， wed better take exercise every day， such as playing basketball， running and so on. Last but not least， we should have good living habits： go to bed early and get up early. As teenagers， we are supposed to sleep for at least 8 hours at night.

In a word， a healthy diet along with enough exercise and good habits can help us keep healthy.