李依婷

My mother is 35 years old. But I still can see how beautiful she is when she is young. She is slim and not very tall. Her eyes are black. She takes me to school every day. In the evening she help me with my homework. If Im hungry she will cook my favourite meals. Shes always trying to encourage me to try something new. I think my mother is the best person in this world. She is always be there for me when I need her. I love her so much. She is my hero.

刘老师点评：

文章语言朴实流畅，对母亲的赞美及感激之情跃然纸上，如： “She is slim and not very tall. ” “...my mother is the best person in this world.”除几个粗心的错误外，语法功底也不错。修改稿可以作为熟读背诵的范例。

My mother is 35 years old. She must have been very beautiful when she was young for she is still elegant now. She is slim and not very tall. Her eyes are black. She takes me to school every day. In the evening she helps me with my homework. If Im hungry she will cook my favourite meals. Shes always trying to encourage me to try something new. I think my mother is the best person in this world. She is always there for me when I need her. I love her so much. She is my heroine！