刘雨舟

My classroom is very good. Because my classroom is cool on summer. I like my desk and chair very much. Because they help me a lot. I have many good sentences on my desk. For example， “No rules no games.” When I was tired， Im thinking these sentences. They talked me that I cant fall asleep. Because I must study hard. Now， I have to leave here. I will remember my desk and my chair. Because they are my friends.

Bob老師点评：这篇文章学生描述了喜欢教室的什么以及离开教室的感受，思路基本清晰，作为考场作文，基本上达到了要求。但缺乏对教室的整体描述，要是有从整体到细节的描述就更好。另外要避免谓语动词、连词、介词等的常见错误（斜体部分）。

范文：

There are forty desks in my classroom. In every desk there are many books. On the wall there are educational pictures. The floor is very clean. There is a TV set in the front of the classroom.What is different from others is our class motto： Study hard， play hard. Enjoy study， enjoy life. I like the motto best， because it makes us know how to live a happy and efficient life. Saying goodbye to the classroom is the wonderful beginning of a new life. At this point I will say： Enjoy saying goodbye， enjoy new life.