姚坤潍

Everyone has their own duties. They need to obey their own rules. As a student， what should we do？

In my opinion， we need to be polite at school. Its common that students always say dirty words. Its very impolite. And the people will feel uncomfortable. So were not supposed to do it. To be a polite student， we are expected to help our classmates in need. You can also feel happy for it， too. Second， were not expected to talk loudly in public， especially in the libraries， restaurants and so on. It can be a noise for others. Third， I think the most important one is to be honest to our parents at home. If you always tell lies， they wont believe you at last. Then you may feel lonely and sad.

If you obey these rules， you may be a polite student.

朱志兰老师点评：这篇文章的主题“礼貌”二词比较抽象，不太好理解。应该从学生面对不同的人和场合时如何做到礼貌待人这一点来入手。这篇文章结构很完整，严格地按照中考的作文要求分为三段，分别从学校、公共场所和家庭三个场所诠释了如何礼貌待人，每个段落的主题句也很明显。不足之处在于，审题立意在最后稍有偏差，“诚实”似乎和“礼貌”有点距离。而且句式多为简单句，很少用到復合句。

范文：

As a student， it is very important for us to be a polite person. But what shall we do？

First， we should treat our parents politely. We should answer them immediately when they talk to us. Dont shout at them when they have different opinions. Share some housework like doing the dishes.

Second， we should greet the teachers， and bow when seeing them in the hallways. Never should a student argue with the teachers. Of course， students should also treat each other politely.

Other people such as the elders should also be treated politely. It is a students duty to help them， like sharing seats.

In short， a polite person can make a difference in our society. Lets start to be polite today！

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英语作文不同于汉语作文，我们主要是要按照要求用英语写出准确的句子。为减少失误，应尽量使用简单句，即一个句子一主语一谓语，同时注意but、and等连接词的使用，还要注意主谓一致和固定短语、句型的灵活运用。