陈珮琪

As a saying goes， “East， west， home is the best”. Ive been to many places， but I think my hometown is the most wonderful. Now let me introduce it to you.

Harbin is the beautiful city which I was born in. It is famous for ice and snow in the world. Its called “Ice City”. Every winter many visitors around the world come here to visit the Ice and Snow World. There are also many places of interest to visit， such as the Central Street， the Sun Island and so on. You can enjoy a lot of delicious food as well， like Harbin sausages and Harbin Beer. If you have a chance to be here， I believe youll like it.

I love my hometown！ People here are very friendly and helpful. Welcome to my hometown！

【简评】文章开头引用名人名言、吸引读者，具有较强的说服力，更能有力地表达作者的观点。

小作者以轻松愉快的语气，向我们娓娓道来她的家乡——美丽的哈尔滨。并将家乡的特色写得细致入微，更显自然亲切。叙述自然生动、结构紧凑，衔接自然连贯，中心突出。

文章最后揭示中心句，实属点晴之笔，概括之语，短促而有力。

指导教师：宗杰