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《2013年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试（江苏卷）说明》（下文统一简称为《考试说明》）英语科在书面表达部分给出了两个示例，一个是表格式，另一个是图画式。《考试说明》对看图作文作了这样的说明：

看图作文的“图”不局限于某一类型的图，如漫画、广告画，也包括其他图画、照片等情景材料。考生们可根据情景图示的寓意、内容或情节线索，传递信息和表达自己的思想。作文应覆盖提示的要点，但避免仅根据提示文字做简单翻译。

本文依据《考试说明》，以高考参考范文为语料，分析图画类高分作文的必备要素，并仿照高考图画类作文的命题形式，原创三篇作文训练材料，供模拟训练和提高。

一、 高考范文分析

先看《考试说明》中提供的作文示例2（2011年江苏卷作文），要求如下：

下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容：

1. 描述照片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等；

2. 结合自身实际，谈谈你的感想；

3. 举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。

注意：

1. 可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。

2. 词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。

3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

The burden of students has been a hot topic for years， but the load of parents has received little attention， especially from their own children.

下面是一篇第五档（21～25分）参考范文：

The burden of students has been a hot topic for years， but the load of parents has received little attention， especially from their own children.

The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a days work， the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder. In response， the mom kneels down to show how happy and thankful she feels.

All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could do to let me have the best. But， totally engaged in my study， I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels， and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return. Now I know I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing， bedroom cleaning， and at least prepare breakfast myself， so as to share mothers daily burden. The picture convinces me it is even more important to be a good daughter than a “good” student.

本参考范文完成了试题规定的任务，且符合第五档作文的评分标准。具体分析可知，图画类高分作文必须具备三个要素。

1. 完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有要点。……