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减负之后，中学生有了更多的课余时间，是选择暂时放下繁重的课业，去户外享受美好青春时光，还是读一本书、看一场电影？如何让课余时间更有意义？听听孩子们怎么说。

习作开头如下：“Nowadays， we students have much more free time than ever before.”

胡林豪 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：The good seaman is known in bad weather.惊涛骇浪，方显英雄本色。

习作：

Nowadays， we students have much more free time than ever before. But quite a number of students in our school dont know how to make good use of their spare time. Some of them play computer games， some watch TV and some chat with others.

I think these activities are meaningless. We can make better use of our spare time by doing the following：

First， we can do more sports to make us stronger and healthier. Second， joining in social activities is a good way to know the world outside our campus. Third， read more books. Books are our friends. At last， try to do some housework. Doing some housework will make you love your parents more.

In a word， dont waste your time any more.

點评：

作者先用“Some...，some...and some...”列举同学们的行为，然后阐明自己的观点，用“First...Second...Third...At last...”给出建议，用法准确、思路清晰。

沈沁怡 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：The secret of success is to keep your goals and beliefs. 成功的秘诀在于坚持自己的目标和信念。

习作：

Nowadays， we students have more free time than ever before. But quite a number of students in our school dont make good use of it. Some students often watch TV， some students play computer games several hours a day， and other students chat with their friends in their spare time.

I dont think these are good practices. Some students in our school agree with me. There are many interesting things we can do. We can take part in some social activities to help others. We can do sports to keep healthy and do housework to help our parents. If you feel tired， it also should be a good idea to read more books because by doing so well enrich our knowledge.

What do you think about it？ If you agree with me， lets do it together.

点评：

作者以 “I dont think ...”过渡，观点鲜明。在提出建议时，用到了“it is a good idea to do sth.”这一句型。

倪福雪？九年级

最喜欢的英语格言：Opportunity is always ready for the people to get. 机遇永远属于准备好的人。

习作：

Nowadays， we students have much more free time than ever before. But many students in our school dont make good use of their spare time. They spend too much time in watching TV， playing computer games， chatting with others on their computer， and so on.

In my opinion， both playing computer games and chatting with others on computer are boring. I think it is important to make better use of our spare time. We can take part in interest groups or read more books. If you are kind， you can take part in social activities to help others. Doing sports to keep healthy is also a good idea. And if you are at home， remember to do some housework to help your parents.

If you do so， you will feel happier than before.

点评：

作者用到了“sb. spend some time in doing sth.”的句式结构，简洁明了。给建议，用到了“it is important to do sth.”句型。

徐梦茹 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言： Never give up is the only secret of your dream. 永不放弃是你梦想实现的唯一秘诀。

习作：

Nowadays， we students have much more free time than ever before. But quite a number of students in our school spend too much time on computer games， and some are busy watching TV or chatting with others. I feel worried about these problems. These things can distract students attention from their studies. Therefore， I suggest that students should make better use of their spare time. My suggestions are as follows：

We can take part in an interest group in which we can learn what we like. When we are at home， we can help our parents to do some housework. Let them know we love them. Books are our good friends. It will be helpful to us to read some books.

Dont waste your time anymore. Lets do something meaningful.

点评：

该文用到了“sb. spend some time on sth.”及“sb. be busy doing sth.”的句式结构，therefore一词起到了承上启下的作用。

胡雨成 九年级

最喜欢的英语格言： The value of life， not with time， but with the depth to be measured. 人生的价值，并不是用时间，而是用深度去衡量的。

习作：

Nowadays， we students have much more free time than ever before. In our school， watching TV， playing computer games and chatting with others are common in some students spare time.

That is to say， those students dont make good use of their spare time. That is bad， not only study but also their health. There are some suggestions about making good use of our spare time. First， we can take part in social activities and interest groups. Second， we can read more books to enrich our knowledge. Third， we can do sports to keep fit.

Dont play computer games again. Its time for us to do something useful. Only in this way can we make full use of our spare time.

點评：

插入语“That is to say”让文章过渡自然。用“not only...but also...”的结构来说明浪费时间的坏处，用法得当。