学生英语作文简析

“地球一小时（Earth Hour）”活动是由WWF（世界自然基金会）发起的全球最大的环保活动。在今年的“地球一小时”活动中，你所在的和平社区举办了“爱护地球、保护环境（Love the Earth, Protect the Environment）”活动。请你根据下列提示介绍一下该活动，并谈谈你对这个活动的看法。

提示：1) 在当天的20:30–21:30熄灯一小时；

2) 每个人都为环保出份力，例如多乘坐公共交通工具、不乱扔垃圾等；

3) 活动号召人们养成节约用电的好习惯；

4) 对本次活动的看法或感想。

Last week, the activity “Love the Earth, Protect the Environment” was held in our Heping Community.

Lots of people took part in the activity. On that day, from 20:30 to 21:30, all lights were off for an hour. Besides this, a lot of people made a decision to support the activity. Some people decided that they would go to work or school by bus or subway. Some promised that they wouldn’t throw litter anywhere.

The aim of the activity is to call on people to save electricity and protect our Earth as much as possible. In my opinion, this is a very meaningful activity. I hope more and more people can take part in it and make our Earth cleaner and nicer.

山东省临沂市黄山中学 九年级3班 杜佳琪

本文结构完整、语言缜密、句式多样，是一篇值得借鉴的优秀习作。作者首先提到有很多人参加了本次活动，然后介绍了前两个要点。要点中间用besides衔接，使得过渡自然流畅。在介绍第二个要点时，作者连用两个宾语从句，表达准确地道，是本文的一大亮点。最后作者表达了自己的感想，希望能有更多人加入这个活动，让地球变得更加干净美好，紧扣主题，使文章成为了一个有机的整体。

指导教师：张蒙蒙

Last week, the activity “Love the Earth, Protect the Environment” was held in our Heping Community.

At 20:30 on that day, everyone turned off their lights. The activity lasted for one hour. Many people made decisions. Some people decided to take the bus or subway to work or school. Some people decided not to throw away any litter.

This activity called on more people to develop good habits for saving electricity. I think this is a good activity. We should love our Earth and protect the environment.

山东省临沂市黄山中学 九年级1班 李杰

本文内容完整、要点齐全、表达地道、语言准确。但是，文章仅仅局限于所给的四个要点，除此之外几乎没有任何拓展。内容上有直接按照要点翻译的痕迹，行文不太流畅。要点与要点之间的衔接有些生硬，文章过渡得不太自然。

指导教师：杜倩